Spring is a very good season.It’s the first of the year.Spring is beautiful。There is a chinese saying：a year’s plan is spring，a day of the plan in the morning .We should save more time to study more hard.But to tell the truth,the weather of spring isn’t very good.The weather sometimes like summer and sometimes like winter.In the morning,it’s very,very cold.At noon,it’s too much hot.But it doesn’t matter,I still like spring.Spring is a season for children.The flower are coulorful and the grass is green .Plants are every where:field,the corner of walls,parks......Bees,butterflys and other insects are dancing.Everything is growing.In spring,children like playing:flying kite,playing football,riding a bicycle......They hug in spring.And I have some activities too, I also hug in spring.

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Spring is a very good season. It’s the first season of the year. Spring is beautiful. There is a Chinese saying: Make your whole year’s plan in the spring and the whole day’s plan in the morning. We should save more time to study hard. But to tell the truth, the weather in spring isn’t very good. The weather is sometimes like summer and sometimes like winter. In the morning, it’s very cold. At noon, it’s much hotter. But it doesn’t matter, I still like spring. Spring is a season for children. The flowers are colorful and the grass is green. Plants are everywhere. You can see bees, butterflies and other insects dancing. Everything is growing. In spring, children can fly kites, play football, and ride bicycles. And I can do some activities too. Let’s welcome spring by a warm hug.

修改老师：Crystal老师 

    六年级:小学生2010