I    had    a     busy      weekend .   I    did     lots     of    things  .On    Saturday   morning  ,  I   watered   the   plants . Then , I  sent  some  emails  to  my  friends . In  the  afternoon , I  didmy  homework .  Then ,  I  played   the   piano .  In  the   evening ,  I  cleaned   my   room   by   myself .  Then  ,  My   family   and   I   visited   family   and   friends .   On   Sunday   morning ,  I  fished  with  my  best  friend ,  Anna  .  Then ,I  painted  the  picture .  In  the  afternoon ,  I  read  an  interesting book .  Then ,  My  mother  and  I   went  to  the   beach .The  sea   was  beautiful .  In  the   evening ,  I  ate  a  big  dinner .  The  food  was  spicy  and  delicious . Then ,  I  saw   a  film  at  the  cinema .  The  film  was  nice .I  was  busy   but   I   was   happy  .

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   I had a busy weekend. I did lots of things. On Saturday morning, I watered the   plants. Then, I  sent  some  emails  to my  friends. In the afternoon, I did my homework.  Then,  I played the piano.  In the evening,  I cleaned my room by   myself.  Then,  My family and I visited family and friends.  

   On Sunday morning,  I fishedwithmybest friend, Anna.  Then, I painted  the  picture.  In the afternoon ,  I read  an interesting book.  Then,  My  mother  and  I   went  to  the   beach. The  sea was  beautiful.  In the evening,  I ate a big dinner.  The food  was spicy and delicious. Then, I saw a film at the cinema.  The film was nice . I was  busy but I was happy  .

    六年级:李勤