I like spring best.Because there  are beautiful flowers everwhere.It’s pretty. I can look flowers.I often play in the spring.Sometimes I can play basketball.I like summer best.Because I  can go swimming.It’s hot.I  often go swimming with my family. I like eat  ice cream in summer.I like autumn best. Beacuse  I can pick apple, but  I can’t swim.I often go on  a picnic with my family.Sometimes I watch  TV on home. I like winter best.Because I can play in the snow.Winter is white and pretty.My mamand sister also like winter.I often  play in the snow in winter.Sometimes I go shopping with my family.

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I like spring. Because in spring, there  are beautiful flowers everwhere. I can see flowers. I can go out to play in spring. Sometimes I play basketball. I like summer. Because I can go swimming. It’s hot in summer, so I often go swimming with my family. And I like eating ice cream too. I like autumn. Beacuse I can pick apples. I often go for a picnic with my family. Sometimes I watch TV at home. I like winter. Because I can make a snowman and have a snowball fight with my friends.

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    五年级:袁泉