After a short time, a green parrot hopped out of the enchanted zoo, and back towards the town. As he was hopping about, the animal control came and shouted to the green parrot; the parrot understood, and started to fly up. The van of the so called, “Animal controller”, followed until the gas ran out. He had no choice but to give up.

  Now of course, the green parrot escaped out of sight, and found some twigs that were going to help him be comfortable during the whole time freedom. When the pirate Captain Cook came back from his journey; he stopped a while to find treasure on an island during his way pass. Once or twice a time he would turn back and sail for land, and so he couldn’t make up his choice. At last he got the treasure from his mates, and started for land immediately, they kept the treasure in a box, which had a code of handsome Ship. None of his mates knew that, so that whenever they wanted to steal some gold from the Captain, they would have to enter the code.

  Now let’s go back to the parrot; the parrot was actually having a pretty good time, but his nest became a pretty kettle of fish. His eyesight was not too bad either; nor his ears, except they were as small as an ant. When Captain. Cook’s ship came closer to land the parrot was all ears to hear what he was saying. “Mates, you go down and fetch as many gold as you can, while I stay here, I had a long week of sailing this ship; and so I’m going to stay in my bed and kick back.”

  His mates were like servants and obeyed immediately, the parrot however; heard his every word, and wanted to stay with the captain and live. He had a plan, and then he flew down and tickled a mate’s toe. The mate laughed, and the parrot stopped. When the mate paid attention to the parrot, the mate said, “How are you doing?” the parrot answered, “Great; how are you doing?” “Not too bad, thanks;” “Take it easy,” they soon became friends, and chatted all along, “So, can you give me a home to live on the ship?” “Sure thing, piece of cake;” when they got the parrot on the ship; the captain came out, and became friend with the parrot also.

  The parrot gave him advice, and he became wealthy and returned all the gold, but kept the treasure he found himself on other islands; and when people trouble the parrot, the captain with which will defeat those guys with his mighty sword.

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After a short time, a green parrot hopped out of the enchanted zoo, and went back towards the town. As he was hopping about, the animal control officer came and shouted to him;the parrot understood, and started to fly up. The van of the so called  “Animal controller”, followed until the gas ran out. He had no choice but to give up.

  Now of course, the green parrot escaped out of sight, and found some twigs that were going to help him be comfortable during the whole free time. When the pirate Captain Cook came back from his journey; he stopped a while to find treasure on an island during his way pass. Once or twice a time he would turn back and sail for land, but he couldn’t make up his mind. At last he got the treasure from his mates, and started for land immediately, they kept the treasure in a box, which had a code of handsome Ship. None of his mates knew that, so whenever they wanted to steal some gold from the Captain, they would have to enter the code.

  Now let’s go back to the parrot; the parrot was actually having a pretty good time, but his nest became a pretty kettle of fish. His eyesight was not too bad either; nor his ears. When Captain Cook’s ship came closer to land, the parrot was all ears to hear what he was saying. “Mates, you go down and fetch as much gold as you can, while I stay here. I ’ve had a long week of sailing on this ship, so I’m going to stay in my bed and kick back.”

  His mates were like servants and obeyed immediately. The parrot, however; heard his every word, and wanted to stay and live with the captain. He had a plan, and then he flew down and tickled a mate’s toe. The mate laughed, and the parrot stopped. When the mate paid attention to the parrot, the mate said, “How are you doing?” the parrot answered, “Great; how are you doing?” “Not too bad, thanks;” “Take it easy,” they soon became friends, and chatted all along, “So, can you give me a home to live on the ship?” “Sure thing, piece of cake;” when they got the parrot on the ship; the captain came out, and became friends with the parrot also.

  The parrot gave him advice, and he became wealthy and returned all the gold, but kept the treasure he found himself on other islands. If people trouble the parrot, the captain with which will defeat those guys with his mighty sword.

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    四年级:欧阳雨鹭