I was one day reading the newspaper when I saw a little kid falling down from the sky; I was the only one who can save him in time for I was on the first floor. I rushed out of the building, and ran outside. I knew that this was very, very extremely dangerous, but if the child falls down he will probably die of pain. He brought a big blanket, and then a pillow, he calculated the area was a 100 percent sure that the child would not die. The child came falling, and falling; “Poof!!” He landed on the pillow.

  I was curious and glad that the child still had his life, and got a reward of fifty pounds of gold and one bag of silver. I was very happy. But when it was night time, I heard an “I’m coming,” noise. I woke up, and saw a big light, then appeared a little flying cat! That was very, very strange. I rubbed my eyes, and pinched everywhere to make sure that it wasn’t a dream. But it was true. The cat said, “Hello, I am Plad, and I am a hero; with me you can transform and save the day every time.”

  I was astonished and said, “Excuse me, but why did you choose me?” the flying cat replied. “Because that you saved a falling kid, and that was a challenge to defeat. You are now my rightful owner.”

  I put on a ring that the flying cat gave me, and went back to sleep. In the morning, I decided to test out my transforming, “Plad, claw set!” and then a strange thing happened, I transformed into “Cat no r !” I tried my powers, and then I saw a sort of bug that I recognize, “Ladybug!” I was going to find her when I found out that my ring was flashing, I said, “Claws off!” then I transformed back. I was very excited to enjoy my first lesson of being cat no r . I was quite astonished, and happy

  At night, I thought I heard another noise, “Not again!” suddenly a round of ball came to me again and said, “Don’t worry, I am Teeky, and you cat no r is going to work with ladybug to defeat villains.”

  I was astonished again, and then Teeky vanished from sight,

  I decided to follow her, but I thought maybe next time, for I didn’t want to bother the kid or girl or other people from sleeping.

  And so I have got a job from Plad to save the world.

修改后：

  I was one day reading the newspaper when I saw a little kid falling down from the sky. I was the only one who could save him in time for I was on the first floor. I rushed out of the building, and ran outside. I knew that this was extremely dangerous, but if the child fell down he would probably die of pain. I brought a big blanket, and then a pillow. After calculating the height, I was 100 percent sure that the child would not die. The child kept falling, and falling; “Poof!!” He landed on the pillow.

  I was curious and glad that the child still had his life, and I got a reward of fifty pounds of gold and one bag of silver. I was very happy. But when it was night time, I heard an “I’m coming,” noise. I woke up, and saw a big beam of light, then appeared a little flying cat! That was very, very strange. I rubbed my eyes, and pinched everywhere to make sure that it wasn’t a dream. But it was true. The cat said, “Hello, I am Plad, and I am a hero; with me you can transform and save the day every time.”

  I was astonished and said, “Excuse me, but why did you choose me?” The flying cat replied, “Because you saved a falling kid, and that was a challenge to defeat. You are now my rightful owner.”

  I put on a ring that the flying cat gave me, and went back to sleep. In the morning, I decided to test out my transforming, “Plad, claw set!” and then a strange thing happened, I transformed into “Cat no r !” I tried my powers, and then I saw a sort of bug that I recognize, “Ladybug!” I was going to find her when I found out that my ring was flashing, I said, “Claws off!” then I transformed back. I was very excited to enjoy my first lesson of being cat no r . I was quite astonished, and happy.

  At night, I heard another noise, “Not again!” Suddenly a round ball came to me again and said, “Don’t worry, I am Teeky, and you cat no r is going to work with ladybug to defeat villains.”

  I was astonished again, and then Teeky vanished from sight.

  I decided to follow her, but I thought maybe next time, for I didn’t want to bother the kid or girl or other people from sleeping.

  And so I have got a job from Plad to save the world.

    四年级:欧阳雨鹭