There was once a boy that liked making things and reading books.

  One day he was reading about a book, which tells a little girl called Cindy; met with a dangerous adventure through the woods. But in it were many challenges which allowed her to be famous. Mike wanted to be just like the little girl in the story, but could he do this on his own?

  Mike decided to try it, for he read a book about many stories; among them was a tale that tells if you don’t try it then you will never learn to walk. And so Mike grabbed his bag and went out his home which just happened to be in the woods. As he wondered about in the woods, he could not tell which way to go, for there were too many trees that are all alike. Since he didn’t have a map, he just turned in circles. At last he found a little passage way which led to a little bridge.

  Mike did not know what was on the other side of the bridge, without even thinking he began walking. As he crossed the bridge, he found three walls. And over the other said was a dark cave. Mike did not look at the walls, he began to walk. But as he approached the first wall, he found one side of it green and the other yellow. “There must be a trap between these pairs!” he thought. And so he took a step backward, to his surprise he found a little sign, on the sign were these word: If you want to go inside the cave, then you must pass these tests. The first test is that you must be able to find out a wall that will lead you to a garden. In that garden you must find a four leaved clover and a rose. Mike started to think about this problem.

  He thought of the words which his mother had told him before she died. “Remember son, green means garden; red means danger, orange means lucky; and yellow means death.” Mike thought, ‘Green means garden, yellow means death! I’ve got it! I must go through the green wall!” and so without even saying a word, he entered the green wall, and there he found a lovely garden, “I knew it! I did it! Now to find a four leaved clover and a rose.” Mike then began to look for those things.

  At last he found a four leaved clover behind a bush, and a rose near the fountain. Mike then went through the green wall again, and soon was back where the two walls were. He then crossed the two walls slowly, “I don’t see why I would have to get these ingredients? What are they for?” he thought. Suddenly he came to the second pair of walls. This time, he found a little hole, he thought to himself, “What should I put inside it? I don’t have anything?” Suddenly, he found out that he had a four leaved clover and a rose. He put them inside the hole and then he could walk pass it. “Looks like the four leaved clover and the rose are helpful to me.”

  The last test came to Mike; it was a math problem; “1+2+3+4+5+6+7…+98+99+100.” “This is easy!” cried Mike. He wrote the answer “5050.” At last the gate opened and Mike walked inside. He found many materials and used them to invent things.

  Did you know that one day, Mike went out and was hurt by a sharp plant. During that discovery Mike went to his workshop, and began inventing something. That time it was 1865, and Mike invented the knife. After that, he invented many things, and was known as the great inventor Mike.

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  There was once a boy that liked making things and reading books.

  One day he was reading a book, which tells a little girl called Cindy; met with a dangerous adventure through the woods. But in it were many challenges which allowed her to be famous. Mike wanted to be just like the little girl in the story, but could he do this on his own?

  Mike decided to try it, for he read a book about many stories; among them was a tale that tells if you don’t try it then you will never learn to walk. So Mike grabbed his bag and went out his home which just happened to be in the woods. As he wondered about in the woods, he could not tell which way to go, for there were too many trees that are all alike. Since he didn’t have a map, he just turned in circles. At last he found a little passage way which led to a little bridge.

  Mike did not know what was on the other side of the bridge, without even thinking he began walking. As he crossed the bridge, he found three walls. And over the other said was a dark cave. Mike did not look at the walls, he began to walk. But as he approached the first wall, he found one side of it green and the other yellow. “There must be a trap between these pairs!” he thought. And so he took a step backward, to his surprise he found a little sign, on the sign were these word: If you want to go inside the cave, then you must pass these tests. The first test is that you must be able to find out a wall that will lead you to a garden. In that garden you must find a four leaved clover and a rose. Mike started to think about this problem.

  He thought of the words which his mother had told him before she died. “Remember son, green means garden; red means danger, orange means lucky; and yellow means death.” Mike thought, ‘Green means garden, yellow means death! I’ve got it! I must go through the green wall!” and without even saying a word, he entered the green wall, and there he found a lovely garden, “I knew it! I did it! Now to find a four leaved clover and a rose.” Mike then began to look for those things.

  At last he found a four leaved clover behind a bush, and a rose near the fountain. Mike then went through the green wall again, and soon was back where the two walls were. He then crossed the two walls slowly, “I don’t see why I would have to get these ingredients? What are they for?” he thought. Suddenly he came to the second pair of walls. This time, he found a little hole, he thought to himself, “What should I put inside it? I don’t have anything?” Suddenly, he found out that he had a four leaved clover and a rose. He put them inside the hole and then he could walk pass it. “Looks like the four leaved clover and the rose are helpful to me.”

  The last test came to Mike; it was a math problem; “1+2+3+4+5+6+7…+98+99+100.” “This is easy!” cried Mike. He wrote the answer “5050.” At last the gate opened and Mike walked inside. He found many materials and used them to invent things.

  Did you know that one day; Mike went out and was hurt by a sharp plant. During that discovery Mike went to his workshop, and began inventing something. It was 1865 at that time, and Mike invented the knife. After that, he invented many things and was known as the great inventor Mike.

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