I’ve always been upset,for the stress I feel often makes me depressive.On a beautiful afternoon,I was keeping on writing to fight for my dream.’There is only a little time left and I must be hard-working enough to attend the high school I’ve dreamed of.’I thought.But I felt so tired that I almost wanted to give it up.Suddenly,a ray of the sun went through the window and directly kissed my face.How warm the feeling was!I couldn’t help walking towards the window and looked out of the window.The sky was blue as if it’s been washed.Cloud seemed to be free and have fun with each other.Somehow,I wanted to listen to music and turned on my MP3 player.I felt like I was lost in paradise while the wind in spring that is not too strong was touching me softly.So I covered my eyes which was dry all day.Soon I realized that it was spring now.I took a deep breath believing that there must be something active in the air.’Spring is hugging me!’I shouted out with excitement.Something real moved me a lot so that I went back to my chair.My mind continued telling me that you were the spring,boy.I’ve never been sad since then.I go on searching for the meaning of life.I haven’t found the answer yet.However,I have been understanding the importance of holding fast to my deam.As common saying goes,’Where there is a will, there is a way.’Perhaps in the future,I’ll achieve my goal and hug my spring again.

修改后：
I’ve always been upset, for the stress I feel often makes me depressive. On a beautiful afternoon, I was keeping on working hard to fight for my dream. ’There is only little time left and I must study hard to improve myself, then I can go the high school I’ve dreamed of.’ I thought. But I felt so tired that I almost gave it up. Suddenly, a ray of the sunshine went through the window and directly shone on my face. How warm it was! I couldn’t help walking towards the window and looked out of it. The sky was blue and clean as if it’s been washed. Clouds seemed to be free and have fun with each other. At that moment, I wanted to listen to some music and then I turned on my MP3 player. I felt like I was lost in paradise where the wind was touching me gently and softly. So I closed my eyes. Soon I realized that it was spring now. I took a deep breath to enjoy the fresh air. ’Spring is hugging me!’ I shouted out happily. Something really moved me a lot. Then I went back to my chair. My mind continued telling me that the spring has come, it was time for starting and keeping on going with your dream. As common saying goes, ’Where there is a will, there is a way.’ In the future, I’ll achieve my goal and hug the spring once again.

修改老师：Crystal 老师 

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