Maybe time to sleep,I should put my pen down,but I won’t.  I think it is good time to think.Think about everythiing---the thing what has happenedand the thing what will happen.Always find truth of everything out,then you will know this world.  I’m always looking for something and learning some things.I’ve already felt time is real treasure,the b-est treasure in the world what thing everyone has.  It’s time to sleep,I shouldn’t keep writing now,but I will listen to music after this.

修改后：

  Maybe it’s time to go to bed, I should put my pen down, but I won’t. 

  I think it is good time to think.Think about everythiing---the thing that has happened and the thing that will happen. If you can always find out the truth of everything, then you will know this world better.  I always look for something and learn some things. And I’ve already felt time is real treasure, the best treasure in the world to everyone.   

  It’s time to go to bed, I shouldn’t waste the treasure in my life.

修改老师：

Andy老师

    初三:黄越