71 years ago, Normandy, France Utah Beach, a team and a team of American and British soldiers braved the hail of bullets, rushed to the front of the bunker, a then a soldier fell, there are still people shouting and running forward, for a moment, blood dyed the entire beach...      71 years ago, the Soviet Union, Stalingrad front, a car and a car truck carrying just came out from the camp of the recruits, officers in the car shouted: "We don’t need to live the deserter!" The voice just fell, there is a shrapnel penetrated his head. The recruits were driven off, some people get guns, some people only to take a bullet, speakers repeat a few words: "don’t get the gun with behind the gun, gun Comrade sacrifice, without a gun comrades picked up his gun, continued the charge..."      71 years ago， Northeast China, a village at night, a naked middle-aged righting arm of the hanging belt of a gleaming sword, turned in front of a group of villagers, they also carry a sword. The middle-aged man said: "They didn’t let the family know?" They were all silent, middle-aged man waved his hand, "go ahead." Half an hour later, the Japanese army base miserably shouts and the sound of the guns and metal collision sound continuously, moonlight shone on the blade has the color of grief and indignation, with the final gunshot, again also could not the moonlight on the ground...      War, in addition to death and destruction, nothing can bring us. The war left us a bitter memory, but also left for justice and peace and dedication to the hero, is that they ended the war and destruction, with their death, instead of the death of others.    71 years later, Normandy, France Utah Beach, then in this bloody war veterans, put on the uniform with decorations hanging, walking on the road, people to their applause and cheer for them, but they also discovered that, veterans of the smile so heavy...      71 years later, Russia, Moscow, Red Square, here is to celebrate, perhaps should be said to commemorate the seventy anniversary of the victory of World War II, the main places, from the world’s heroes, respected by the leaders of all countries.    71 years later China, Northeast China, a small town, a class of students, under the leadership of a 80 year old man, came to the monument, the old man tells the story of when his enemies and survive and escape experience, is still excited. He sang the song that he was blooded Songs: "Broadsword to the enemy’s head cut off......" The students burst into tears......      The end of the war. Let us to commemorate the sleeping heroes!!!  Memorial, in order not to forget the past, for the sake of the world freedom and peace and fighting the soldiers, warriors, heroes!!

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  71 years ago, Normandy, France Utah Beach, a team and a team of American and British soldiers braved the hail of bullets, rushed to the front of the bunker, and then a soldier fell. There were still people shouting and running forward. For a moment, blood dyed the entire beach...      

  71 years ago, the Soviet Union, Stalingrad front, a car and a truck just came out from the camp of the recruits. Officers in the car shouted,"We don’t need to live the deserter!" The voice just fell, a shrapnel penetrated his head. The recruits were driven off, some people got guns, some people only took a bullet.               

  71 years ago, Northeast China, a village at night, a naked middle-aged man with a gleaming sword in his right hand appeared in front of a group of villagers. They also carried a sword. The middle-aged man said,"They didn’t let the family know?" They were all silent, the man waved his hand, "go ahead." Half an hour later, the miserable shouts, the sound of the guns and metal collision could be continuously heard in the Japanese army base. The blade had the color of grief and indignation under the moonlight.                                                                                 

  War, in addition to death and destruction, can bring us nothing. The war left us not only a bitter memory, but also left us justice and peace with the dedication of the heroes.                                  

  71 years later, Normandy, France Utah Beach, the veterans put on the uniform with decorations hanging, walking on the road. People applauded and cheered for them, but they also discovered that veterans smiled so heavily...                                    

  71 years later, Russia, Moscow, Red Square, It was to celebrate the seventy anniversary of the victory of World War II.The heroes from differnet parts of the world would be respected by the leaders of all countries.                                              

  71 years later China, Northeast China, a small town, a class of students, under the leadership of a 80 year old man, came to the monument. The old man told the story of his escaping experiences from the enimies excitedly. The students burst into tears......                  

  We should not forget the past, for the sake of the world freedom and peace and fighting the soldiers, warriors, heroes!  

    初三:张博涵