Spring is when life’s alive in everything.I went to xiangshan park with my mather yesterday. T-he air is very clean and the sunshine is very warm.     
     The xiangshan park have a piece of grass.l like lying on the ground of the park in spring.The grass is  very soft,and I love the feeling of lying on the grass.And,I enjoy lying of the grass und-er the sun.
     The park have many peach blossoms,too.Chinese poets often compare beautiful women to peach blo-ssoms in spring. The warm quick rains and sudden frothing of pink peach blossoms and dogwood dappl-ing with white stars the dark river swamp and far-off hills.So,these peach blossoms were very beautiful.      Under the big tree, I fed the birds with a happy mood.The birds were very lovely,and I very li-ke them.       Yestreday,I have a good time.What a good day!

 
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    Spring is coming and everything begins to come back to life. It’s time for go outing. I went to Xiangshan park with my mother yesterday. The air was very clean. The sun shone brightly and it was very warm.     
     In spring, l like lying on the grass in the park. The grass was very soft, and I enjoyed the feeling of lying on the grass, especially under the sun.
     All the flowers in the park were blooming beautifully. Trees turned green. I heard birds singing happily.  We had a picnic there. And I rode a bike, too.    
     I had a good time there. What a good day! 

修改老师：Crystal 老师 

    初二:陈婧涵