I used to have many dreams. As I grow up, I still have so many dreams. Every dream makes me change.

 

  When I was six years old, I dreamed to be a student. This dream made me change a lot. I studied hard and I did more homework to be a student.

 

  But when I became a student, I wanted to be a writer because I love writing so much. Being a writer means more and more people will read my passages and I can share my ideas with everyone. Well, it also makes you keep calm and help me become wiser.

 

  Now, I am dreaming to be a kid because I want to stay with my parents more often. Maybe this dream is very strange. But when I grow up, I find I have lost lots of amazing feelings ofbeing a kid. I am dreaming to be a kid. It means I can play with parents and spend more with them. This dream makes me change. I think I must study hard to make my parents not work so hard. They have done a lot for me and my sister.

  I hope to become a kid again and stay with my parents more time. The dream makes me know the hardships of my parents. And I have changed because of this dream.

修改后：

  I used to have many dreams. As I grow up, my dreams change a lot.

  Before I went to school, I dreamed of becoming a student.  But when I became a student, I wanted to be a writer because I love writing so much. Being a writer means more and more people will read my passages and I can share my ideas with everyone. Well, it can also help me become wiser.

  Now, I am dreaming of becoming a kid. Maybe this dream is very strange. But as I grow up, I find I have lost lots of amazing feelings of being a kid. If I were a little kid again, I could play with parents and spend more with them.

  This dream makes me change, too. I think I must study hard to make my parents not to work so hard. They have done too much for me and my sister.

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    初二:蒋婉迪