The very important person I can never fail to remember is my Chinese teacher, Ms. Lu. She has a lot of advantages such as honest, humorous, helpful and so on, but it isn’t key point.

     When I was in grade one, my exam results were not very good so all teachers didn’t liked me very much, but Ms. Lu didn’t give up me. She encouraged me to study,at the same time she helped me .

    When I was in grade three ,l was good at all subjects and my exam results were very good. Ms. Lu said that I set up a good example for students.

    Of all the teachers I know perhaps no one deserves my respect more than Ms. Lu .

作者:徐颐珽

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   The very important person I can never fail to remember is my Chinese teacher, Ms. Lu. She has a lot of virtues such as honesty, humor, helpfulness and so on, but it isn’t the key point.

     When I was in Grade one, my exam results were not very good, so all teachers didn’t like me very much, but Ms. Lu didn’t give me up. She encouraged me to study and helped me a lot.

    When I was in Grade three, l was good at all subjects and my exam results were very good. Ms. Lu said that I set up a good example for the other students.

    Of all the teachers I know perhaps no one deserves my respect more than Ms. Lu .

    初一:徐颐珽