With the rapid development of technology, l want to invent a new kind of alarm clock which can cook food if it is possible.

  First of all, people of the modern city are all live at a fast speed, more and more people have no time to cook breakfast, however, breakfast is the most important meal in one day. Therefore, this alarm clock which I invent will help many people.

  Secondly, many young people hate the noise of the alarm clock, but this alarm clock will use the smell of bacon instead of the loud sound to wake up people.

  I really want to invent this new kind of alarm clock to increase happiness. I hope my dream can come true.

作者:徐颐珽

修改后：

  With the rapid development of technology, l want to invent a new kind of alarm clock which can cook food if it is possible.

  First of all, the pace of life in the modern city is fast, more and more people have no time to cook breakfast. However, breakfast is the most important meal in one day. Therefore, this alarm clock which I invent will help many people.

  Secondly, many young people hate the noise of the alarm clock, but this alarm clock will use the smell of bacon instead of the loud sound to wake people up.

  I really want to invent this new kind of alarm clock to increase happiness. I hope my dream can come true.

    初一:徐颐珽